Language Arts: Descriptive Writing: Show Dont Tell
Using details and actions to create vivid writing
Language Arts: Descriptive Writing: Show Dont Tell
Using details and actions to create vivid writing
Language Arts - Grade 6-8
- 1
Rewrite this telling sentence so it shows the feeling: Mia was nervous before the speech.
Use body language and small actions to reveal the feeling.
One possible answer is: Mia gripped her note cards so tightly that the edges bent, and her voice shook as she stepped toward the microphone. - 2
Rewrite this telling sentence so it shows the scene: The room was messy.
One possible answer is: Clothes spilled off the chair, books lay open across the floor, and empty cups crowded the desk. - 3
Rewrite this telling sentence so it shows the emotion: Carlos was excited about the game.
Think about how someone acts when they cannot wait for something to start.
One possible answer is: Carlos bounced on his toes, grinned at his teammates, and kept checking the clock until the game began. - 4
Read the sentence: The soup was hot. Rewrite it to show that the soup was hot without using the word hot.
One possible answer is: Steam curled up from the bowl, and Jenna pulled back after the first spoonful burned the tip of her tongue. - 5
Rewrite this telling sentence so it shows the weather: It was a cold morning.
Use sensory details such as what someone feels, sees, or breathes.
One possible answer is: Frost coated the sidewalk, and Sam shoved his hands deep into his pockets as his breath drifted in white clouds. - 6
Which sentence is a better example of show dont tell? A: Leah was sad. B: Leah stared at the empty seat beside her and wiped her eyes with her sleeve. Explain your choice.
Sentence B is a better example because it uses actions and details to help the reader infer that Leah is sad instead of stating the feeling directly. - 7
Rewrite this telling sentence so it shows the character trait: Mr. Chen was kind.
Show kindness through what the person says or does.
One possible answer is: Mr. Chen stayed after class to help Jamal with his assignment and slipped an extra snack into his backpack for later. - 8
Add one sensory detail to make this sentence show more clearly: The beach was beautiful.
One possible answer is: The beach glowed with golden light, waves hissed against the shore, and the salty breeze lifted Maya's hair. - 9
Rewrite this telling sentence so it shows the action: Devon was in a hurry.
Use quick movements and strong action verbs.
One possible answer is: Devon snatched his backpack off the table, nearly tripped over his untied shoe, and raced out the door without finishing his toast. - 10
Write one original showing sentence for this telling idea: The dog was tired.
One possible answer is: The dog dropped onto the rug with a heavy sigh and barely lifted its head when the doorbell rang.